tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6595970838257652202.post94914540216426192..comments2023-05-15T06:56:58.527-05:00Comments on Publishing Yourself: Running Red Preview PackageKeri Knutsonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04346851320878170235noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6595970838257652202.post-26635168211827484242011-04-24T18:06:56.557-05:002011-04-24T18:06:56.557-05:00Thanks for the feedback, Chris! I really appreciat...Thanks for the feedback, Chris! I really appreciate it. Yeah, I put blurb writing right up there with synopsis writing. Clear, unclear, too much, too little, too overwrought, too pedestrian? <br /><br />I'm really looking forward to this experiment to see if it generates interest pre-publication.Keri Knutsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04346851320878170235noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6595970838257652202.post-56010008525991194202011-04-23T15:33:33.284-05:002011-04-23T15:33:33.284-05:00What I like about your Preview Package is that you...What I like about your Preview Package is that you can look anywhere at random within your chapter sample and come up with some real good showing (not telling). Examples: He closed his eyes and leaned his head back...He looked at the silver nameplate...the pitiful little knife fell to the ground with a sharp clatter.<br /><br />In order to understand the blurb I had to read it 2-3 times. This may be due to me having never read anything within the vampire sub-genre, though.<br /><br />Your cover looks nice (imho). However, there is nothing that jumps out and screams "look at me!"<br /><br />Here is my favorite part:<br /><br /><i>The hunter dropped the ruined wrist and grabbed the junkie, jerking his head up and exposing his throat. It was over in a moment, and all that was left was the spray pumped out across the expanse of brick that formed the alley wall, so much red graffiti. The hunter closed his eyes as he felt the electricity shooting up into the center of his brain where it exploded like a grand fireworks display, dying out to leave the afterimage of brightly arcing reds, blues, and greens tracing through the darkness. As the blood slowed to a trickle, the hunter released his hold on the junkie, just another bundle of rags.</i><br /><br />I love the description. The reader is brought moment by moment right along with what is happening. The paragraph begins with slick action, then that action is described beautifully--none-to-subtly, I might add (which is perfectly appropriate for what just happened). Then what's left hanging at the end falls just as quickly as it all started. <br /><br />Very nicely done!Chrishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09922841819122404653noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6595970838257652202.post-2265444237769452192011-04-23T14:36:01.081-05:002011-04-23T14:36:01.081-05:00Does this mean you can cook dinner now?Does this mean you can cook dinner now?hjwiihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00341625225952505696noreply@blogger.com